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Message de bamoo posté le 2004-11-09 13:26:56 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour, j'ai un résumé de texte en anglais que j'ai fait et j'aimerais que vous m'aidiez à corriger mes fautes et éventuellement, si vous avez des pistes pour étoffer encore un peu plus mon travail...Merci :-)
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SpaceShipOne is a private rocket ship. The program was financed by Paul Allen to win the $10 million Ansari Prize.
The ship was designed by the American engineer Burt Rutan. It was probably very hard to do because nobody had done this before him. However, Burt Rutan made already aviation news in 1986 by developing the Voyager, the only aircraft to fly non-stop around the world without refuelling. I really think this can be considered as the biggest exploit never done since 1969, when men walked on the moon.
One of the conditions of Ansari was to do 2 flights in the space. The first flight was done in June. SpaceShipOne achieved its second flight on Monday, climbing to an altitude of 62 miles (about 100 km, the line considered as the beginning of the space).
Of course, some people will say that this program was too expensive and it’s not really useful. All this money could be used for something more useful as fight against pollution or fight against hunger. To some degree, I agree…
However, I think it is also a big progress in the aerospace industry. The development will also allow every country in the world to have their own astronauts rather than the privileged few. In fact, this is a great opportunity because it could make easier the access to space for every people latter.
Thus, in a few years, it could have space tourists…but the ticket price will be probably very expensive, at least at the beginning.
Bonjour, j'ai un résumé de texte en anglais que j'ai fait et j'aimerais que vous m'aidiez à corriger mes fautes et éventuellement, si vous avez des pistes pour étoffer encore un peu plus mon travail...Merci :-)
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SpaceShipOne is a private rocket ship. The program was financed by Paul Allen to win the $10 million Ansari Prize.
The ship was designed by the American engineer Burt Rutan. It was probably very hard to do because nobody had done this before him. However, Burt Rutan made already aviation news in 1986 by developing the Voyager, the only aircraft to fly non-stop around the world without refuelling. I really think this can be considered as the biggest exploit never done since 1969, when men walked on the moon.
One of the conditions of Ansari was to do 2 flights in the space. The first flight was done in June. SpaceShipOne achieved its second flight on Monday, climbing to an altitude of 62 miles (about 100 km, the line considered as the beginning of the space).
Of course, some people will say that this program was too expensive and it’s not really useful. All this money could be used for something more useful as fight against pollution or fight against hunger. To some degree, I agree…
However, I think it is also a big progress in the aerospace industry. The development will also allow every country in the world to have their own astronauts rather than the privileged few. In fact, this is a great opportunity because it could make easier the access to space for every people latter.
Thus, in a few years, it could have space tourists…but the ticket price will be probably very expensive, at least at the beginning.
Réponse: re:Textual Commentary de willy, postée le 2004-11-09 20:43:10 (S | E)
Bonsoir bamoo. Voilà ce que je te propose comme changements. Je ne note que ceux-ci.
- ... done this before. (sans "him")
- ...had already done ..
- ...considered the biggest exploit ever done ..
- in space /...regarded as the beginning of space.
- ...could be used for OU : spent on the fight ...
- I agree up to a point with such an assertion.
- it could make the access to space trips easier for everyone of us later.
- ..there could be space tourists...but the fares will probably be ...
Réponse: re:Textual Commentary de bamoo, postée le 2004-11-10 10:22:45 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour tes commentaires qui m'ont été très utiles... :-)
Réponse: re:Textual Commentary de willy, postée le 2004-11-10 10:28:09 (S | E)
You're welcome, bamoo !
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