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Message de tibo60510 posté le 02-03-2008 à 15:49:20 (S | E | F)
Voila le court texte que je dois faire pour lundi. Est-ce que quelqu'un peut vérifier les erreurs ? Merci beaucoup !!!
The document is a letter. It was written by Mrs Bolton, a student’s parent and it was published on a website (xxx). She’s writing to Obama. We can guess that students’ parents complain about junk food. They may want healthier meals in schools. They’re asking for Obama support. He’s one of the candidates who stand for election of a new president in US and he’s also the senator of Ilinois.
Students’parents have created a program which would increase children’s fruit and vegetables consumption. In the same time, it would be beneficial for farmers who supply good food. Over the last two decades, the number of children affected by obesity has dramatically increased. That’s why they want to serve more fruit and vegetables in order to finally replaced junk food by healthy snacks. The fresh Fruit And Vegetables Snack Program is a real progress in the American society.
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Modifié par bridg le 02-03-2008 15:50
Message de tibo60510 posté le 02-03-2008 à 15:49:20 (S | E | F)
Voila le court texte que je dois faire pour lundi. Est-ce que quelqu'un peut vérifier les erreurs ? Merci beaucoup !!!
The document is a letter. It was written by Mrs Bolton, a student’s parent and it was published on a website (xxx). She’s writing to Obama. We can guess that students’ parents complain about junk food. They may want healthier meals in schools. They’re asking for Obama support. He’s one of the candidates who stand for election of a new president in US and he’s also the senator of Ilinois.
Students’parents have created a program which would increase children’s fruit and vegetables consumption. In the same time, it would be beneficial for farmers who supply good food. Over the last two decades, the number of children affected by obesity has dramatically increased. That’s why they want to serve more fruit and vegetables in order to finally replaced junk food by healthy snacks. The fresh Fruit And Vegetables Snack Program is a real progress in the American society.
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Modifié par bridg le 02-03-2008 15:50
