Rédaction/robbery (1)
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Rédaction/robbery
Message de nuyoricaine posté le 24-09-2008 à 14:53:02 (S | E | F)
bonjour j'ai un petit texte a faire en anglais et je voudrais savoir ce que vous en pensez et si il y a des fautes.Merci d'avance.
This morning at 10:50 am, two armed robbers burst into the Jewellery center.These men wore hoods so that nobody can recognize them.
One of them screamed "put your hands up!!!" while the other aimed guns at manager's head and threatened to kill him if he didn't hand over them the keys of the safe to steal jewels.
Everybody was shocked,traumatized and didn't know what to do.
Fortunately 10 min later the police arrived but the robbers managed to get away.
They estimate the value at 2 millions $, the biggest raid since 2002.
The Police think they never find them because they were masked.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 24-09-2008 14:58
+ titre distinctif
Réponse: Rédaction/robbery de ydenting1, postée le 24-09-2008 à 16:35:14 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Je n'aurais pas écrit ceci tout à fait de cette manière mais voici néanmoins quelques remarques.
This morning at 10:50 am, two armed robbers burst into the Jewellery center.These men wore hoods so that nobody can recognize them.
One of them screamed "put your hands up!!!" while the other aimed guns at THE manager's head and threatened to kill him if he
Everybody was shocked,traumatized and didn't know what to do.
Fortunately 10 min later the police arrived but the robbers managed to get away.
They estimate the value at 2 millions $, the biggest raid since 2002.
The Police think they MIGHT never find them because they were masked.
Réponse: Rédaction/robbery de nuyoricaine, postée le 24-09-2008 à 18:53:53 (S | E)
merci. j'essayerai de l'écrire autrement pour que cela fasse mieux
