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Message de nuage-22 posté le 07-10-2008 à 19:04:50 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir tout le monde...
J'ai un article à faire sur une photo qui montre que les Etats Unis n'aident pas assez l'afrique.. pouvez vous me corriger s'il vous plait, vos idées sont les bienvenues aussi. MERCI !!
Today, in our front page, we wished put this photo because it can open us eyes....
The photo depicts a Masai woman near her there is a sac of weat from usa. The photograph aimed at showing a contrast between the African tradition and western culture.
Obviously, weat is not part of traditional african cooking. Contrary to sorghum or millet. this photo is very interesting because she shows the inadequacy of the us help. This form of charity seems useless . In that case, why America sends these gifts of wheat? it wants to appear as generous, helpful,kind hearted....but the apparences are deceptive : it's For economics reasons, Yes, indeed . In other words, America wants to be present in Africa to controle ores : gold, diamonds , crude oil or uranium.
It's very strategic ! America may have got rid of their extra for Take advantage of natural resources of Africa.
the woman might feel embarrassed or even humiliated! it isn't worth sending useless chooses... She could really help Africa.. because in Black Africa their is drought , starvation...
At the moment it's difficult for America Because of the economic crisis..... But It is necessary to know that Amerique is not the only one to make these practices...
Réponse: Correction article de laure95, postée le 08-10-2008 à 10:15:01 (S | E)
Bonjour, voici ce que tu dois corriger
- a sac: mot français.
-from usa: seul pays où il faut mettre THE + usa en majuscules.
- The photograph aimed at: utilise le présent simple.
- she shows: SHE: pour une personne!
- why America sends these gifts of wheat? : question: MOT INTERR + AUX DO + SUJET + INFINITIF DU VERBE.
- economics reasons: pas de "s" à un adjectif!
- to controle
- America may have got rid of t
- for Take advantage: to take adavantage
- natural resources of Africa: natural Africa's ressources.
- their is: there is (their: c'est le possessif).
- Amerique
Bon courage!
Réponse: Correction article de nuage-22, postée le 08-10-2008 à 14:15:43 (S | E)
MERCIII =)
Réponse: Correction article de doriane7, postée le 08-10-2008 à 15:19:21 (S | E)
bonjour;voila ce que je crois que tu devrais corriger
sac=tu peux dire wheat'sbag
usa=the USA
the photograph aimedto=mieux vaut utiliser the present tense
at showing=to show
a contrast=the contrast
she shows=it shows "it" pour les objet..
of the us=US en majuscule
why America sends gifts of wheat?=wh question :why=to do=subject=verb (a l'infinitif)
it's for=it is (ne pas utiliser de form contractive quand tu ecris un devoir)
economics=sans "s"
contole=sans "e"
ores=our
it's very stategic=it'is (no contractive form)
of natural resources of africa=natural African resources
the woman =sans the
it'isn't=it is not
their is=their is a possessif pronoun ,use there is
it's =it is
good luck
