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Message de syrine1 posté le 26-03-2009 à 21:59:18 (S | E | F)
salut à tous
j'ai écrit ce poème et je vais prendre un note sur ce poème qui sera noté, alors s'il vous plait aidez-moi pour bien faire ce poème et pour le bien corriger.
L e portable parle de ses avantages et ses inconvénients :

I'm with you everywhere
if you need me you find me there
i'm always here my dear
but be careful about your ear


I have many advantages
and also disavantages
I shorten distances
and I facilitate works

I'm a mean of communication
you can talk about information
relaxing in your vacation
and preparing organization

I help you in cases of emergency
you can phone the agency
but you may lose touch with family
and it's a mean of robbery

Don't misuse me
by showing off
and overspending me
in bad stuff

merci en avance
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Modifié par bridg le 26-03-2009 22:06
+ titre

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Réponse: Portable (correction) de linsey34, postée le 28-03-2009 à 19:12:07 (S | E)
Dear syrine,

en rouge les erreurs à corriger:

I'm with you everywhere
if you need me you find me there
i'm always here my dear
but be careful about your ear


I have many advantages
and also disavantages
I shorten distances
and I facilitate works

I'm a mean of communication
you can talk about information
relaxing in your vacation
and preparing organization

I help you in cases of emergency
you can phone the agency
but you may lose touch with family
and it's a mean of robbery

Don't misuse me
by showing off
and overspending me
in bad stuff

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Réponse: Portable (correction) de syrine1, postée le 30-03-2009 à 12:29:07 (S | E)
merci beaucoup linsey c'est très gentil de votre part de me corriger les fautes
thanks

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