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Message de etoilefilante83 posté le 26-05-2009 à 21:20:48 (S | E | F)
Bonjour, j'aurais aimé avoir une correction sur mon texte en anglais par rapport à une image
d'avance.
These picture is in colors.We can see a woman that must be in a hairdresser of beauty.In a mirror at the left top of picture, a man looks her wristwatch.
In a foreground, a high tech machine with several arms articuled makes a hairstyle and a manicure to ladie.
She wears a blue evening dress and high-heeled shoes.
One's arm of the machine keeps a dress of woman but we don't know exactly what it to do.
The ladie must be go out this evening and so she goes at a hairdresser of beauty to make pretty.
These picture imagine a future world. Maybe that people won't their houseworks neither cook. A machine or a robot will make something.
A technology has already been developed. I think that evolution is a good thing but she can be have consequences. With internet, now,we can found many informations on somethng but problems like kidnapping are connected with internet.
People must be vigilant and to keep an eye on theirs kids.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 26-05-2009 21:34
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Message de etoilefilante83 posté le 26-05-2009 à 21:20:48 (S | E | F)
Bonjour, j'aurais aimé avoir une correction sur mon texte en anglais par rapport à une image
d'avance.These picture is in colors.We can see a woman that must be in a hairdresser of beauty.In a mirror at the left top of picture, a man looks her wristwatch.
In a foreground, a high tech machine with several arms articuled makes a hairstyle and a manicure to ladie.
She wears a blue evening dress and high-heeled shoes.
One's arm of the machine keeps a dress of woman but we don't know exactly what it to do.
The ladie must be go out this evening and so she goes at a hairdresser of beauty to make pretty.
These picture imagine a future world. Maybe that people won't their houseworks neither cook. A machine or a robot will make something.
A technology has already been developed. I think that evolution is a good thing but she can be have consequences. With internet, now,we can found many informations on somethng but problems like kidnapping are connected with internet.
People must be vigilant and to keep an eye on theirs kids.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 26-05-2009 21:34
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Réponse: Correction about a picture de kolimang, postée le 27-05-2009 à 10:21:27 (S | E)
Bonjour etoilefilante,
Voici une série de points à revoir :
These picture -> These est au pluriel, il vous faut un démonstratif au singulier.
in a hairdresser of beauty -> Que voulez-vous dire ?
a hairdresser = le coiffeur dans le sens de la personne qui vous coiffe, pas le lieu.Pour dire "chez le coiffeur" on dira : at the hairdresser's ("shop" sous-entendu)
at the left top of picture -> in the top left-hand corner of the picture
a man looks
(manque une préposition) her wristwatch. -> her = féminin, vous avez besoin du possessif masculinIn a foreground -> vous parlez d'un premier plan bien déterminé, celui de l'image que vous détaillez, donc il vous faut un article défini.
several arms articuled -> ordre des mots
to
(manque un article) ladie. -> Singulier : lady, Pluriel : ladiesShe wears -> le verbe est bon, mettre au présent continu
One's arm of the machine
we don't know exactly what it to do. -> Que voulez-vous dire ?
The ladie must be go out this evening and so she goes at a hairdresser's
These picture imagine : essayez de trouver un verbe qui convient mieux (et attention à l'accord)
Maybe that people won't
(manque le verbe principal) their houseworks neither cook.I think that evolution is a good thing but she (mauvais pronom) can be have consequences.
we can found (base verbale après un modal) many informations ("information" n'est pas dénombrable en anglais, ce mot ne peut pas être précédé de "many")
People must be vigilant and
Bon travail.
Kolimang
Réponse: Correction about a picture de etoilefilante83, postée le 27-05-2009 à 17:49:19 (S | E)
Bonjour, après avoir obtenu des conseils j'ai réécrit mon texte.
This picture is in colors. We can see a woman that must be at the hairdresser's.
In a mirror, in the top left-hand corner of picture a man looks at his wristwatch.
In the foreground, a high tech machine with several articuled arms makes a hairstyle and a manicure to lady. She wearing a blue evening dress and high-heeled shoes. One arm of the machine keeps a dress of woman. The lady must go out this evening and so she goes at a hairdresser's to make pretty. This picture describes the future world. Maybe that people won't do their housework neither cook.
A machine or a robot will make something.
A technology has already been developed. I think that evolution is a good thing but it can have consequences. With internet, now,we can find a lot of informations. on somethng but problems like kidnapping are connected with internet.
People must be vigilant and keep an eye on theirs kids.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-05-2009 17:53
Topics fusionnés; il est inutile de créer un nouveau post,il suffit de continuer l'ancien,merci.
Réponse: Correction about a picture de lie, postée le 28-05-2009 à 04:29:18 (S | E)
"She wearing" -> She's wearing or she is wearing (Be + ing)
Réponse: Correction about a picture de etoilefilante83, postée le 03-06-2009 à 19:52:20 (S | E)
Bonsoir à tous.
Pouvez-vous me dire si ces réponses sont correctes. Merci
I choose this picture because it original and the subject is very interesting.
There is no solution because the high tech technology progresses continuously :
we not fight to the systeme.
