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Message de zarbie79 posté le 03-11-2008 à 12:50:46 (S | E | F)
salut, après avoir étudiée différentes scènes d'un épisode de cold case en classe, je devais écrire un texte sur ma scène préférée. Si quelqu'un pouvait me corriger les fautes d'orthographes des lignes suivantes je lui en serai très reconnaissant merci d'avance.
Texte :
My favourite scene in the episode is the scene number 4 because we begin to know the victim. It is so that we learn that Maurice's mother died of cancer in 1981 and that Maurice disappeared 23 years ago. It is this scene which begins to hand on the spectator because we begin to interest in the history.
Futhermore, Maurice worked in the store with his brother and he has no friends and girlfriend : Maurice may have no plan for this future and, with the appearance of this element, the spectator can think that the murderer is the father. So, Maurice was moody and erratic and, before the death, he had arrived twice late at the school which name is Marshall hight. Finally, the Maurice's father didn't call the police after the dsappearance. This scene is my favourite because she informs about the psychology of Maurice and it takes the spectator on wrong tracks.
Merci à ceux qui auront pris le temps de lire
Message de zarbie79 posté le 03-11-2008 à 12:50:46 (S | E | F)
salut, après avoir étudiée différentes scènes d'un épisode de cold case en classe, je devais écrire un texte sur ma scène préférée. Si quelqu'un pouvait me corriger les fautes d'orthographes des lignes suivantes je lui en serai très reconnaissant merci d'avance.
Texte :
My favourite scene in the episode is the scene number 4 because we begin to know the victim. It is so that we learn that Maurice's mother died of cancer in 1981 and that Maurice disappeared 23 years ago. It is this scene which begins to hand on the spectator because we begin to interest in the history.
Futhermore, Maurice worked in the store with his brother and he has no friends and girlfriend : Maurice may have no plan for this future and, with the appearance of this element, the spectator can think that the murderer is the father. So, Maurice was moody and erratic and, before the death, he had arrived twice late at the school which name is Marshall hight. Finally, the Maurice's father didn't call the police after the dsappearance. This scene is my favourite because she informs about the psychology of Maurice and it takes the spectator on wrong tracks.
Merci à ceux qui auront pris le temps de lire
Réponse: Expression de benjytalbi, postée le 03-11-2008 à 13:00:09 (S | E)
A la place de mettre we begin to interest in the history
j'aurais mi ( à vérifier .. ! ) :
We begin to be interested in the history
J'espère t'avoir aidé !
P.S : J'ai cru apercevoir d'autres erreurs mais des personnes plus qualifiées que moi pourront te les corriger
Réponse: Expression de benjytalbi, postée le 03-11-2008 à 13:02:59 (S | E)
Ah autre chose :
" At the school wich name is Marshall hight" je crois que ça fait un peu lourd ..
Met plutôt :
"At the school called Marshall Hight"
Good Luck
Réponse: Expression de zarbie79, postée le 03-11-2008 à 13:23:07 (S | E)
merci beaucoup pour ton aide
